ご投稿ありがとうございます！
こちら『Carnival Chains』も合わせまして拝読いたしました。

セリフのない中でしっかりと
場面の流れを描けるのは
挑戦的ですばらしいですね…！

その分、コマ割りにメリハリが出てくると
もっとよいのかなと思いました。

現状、ひとつづきの映像を
そのまま上から割っていった印象です。
「打った」「投げた」「飛んでいった」「スタンドに入った」
など、決めのシーンにおいては、
偶数ページの1コマ目（めくり）
においてあげるとより印象がつよくなるかと存じます。

全体的に、同じカメラバランスが多いので、
見きれるほどのアップや、
逆に小物だけのカットにするなど、
カメラワークでの演出ができてくると、
アクションにさらに迫力が出るかと存じます。

また、キャラクターについてですが、
目の印象がどのキャラも同じ感じなので、
目で描き分けができてくるともっとよくなるのではないでしょうか。

次回の作品も拝読できることを楽しみにしております！
何卒よろしくお願いいたします。

Thank you for your contribution!
I also read "Carnival Chains" as well.

You are able to depict the flow of a scene
It is challenging and wonderful that you can depict the flow of a scene
It is challenging and wonderful...!

I thought it would be even better if you could make the panel layout more vivid.
I thought it would be even better if the frame layout was more vivid.

I thought it would be better if the frame layout was more lively.
I have the impression that the images are divided from the top as they are.
The scenes of "hit," "threw," "flew away," "went into the stands," etc.
In the scene of decision, such as
The first frame of the even-numbered pages (the flip side)
The camera balance is the same throughout the image.

Since the camera balance is often the same throughout, it would be better to use a close-up or a close-up of the subject.
It would be better to use a close-up shot that is too large to be seen, or a shot with only small objects.
If you can direct the camera work by using close-ups that are too much to look at, or by using cuts of only small objects
If you could direct the camera work in such a way that the viewer can see enough of the action
I think the action will be more powerful.

Also, regarding the characters.
The eyes of all the characters look the same, so I think it would be better if the eyes could be differentiated.
I think it would be better if you could separate the characters by their eyes.

I look forward to reading your next work!
Thank you very much for your time.

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